Feedback on Writing

Weekend Homework: Have a go at translating - Paul's travel diary on Page 98 of the black book
Also, there will be a quiz on page 104 Verbs only of black book.


Known Kanji were not used　　今日は　今　楽しみ　Eｔｃ

Year 11 sentence patterns were not used　　
～ないほうがいい
～たら

げんこうようし was not used correctly (place to put comma and full stop, comma between sentences & after time, conjunction word, not English comma)

Spelling errors (e.g. オーストラリア、ゆうめい, くる　etc)

How to put English words in Japanese writing (e.g. MCG etc)

Conjunction word were not used effectively

Do not use あなた (or unusual Japanese name)

Irrelevant information (Read the task carefully: where you are, who you are, who you are writing to, what you are writing about)

Confusion between ながら&間(あいだ) (maybe using 時instead?)

　Use たくさんの　when describing a noun. Eg. Lots of people – たくさんの人